Written for ScreamPrompts
#42 (link: screamprompts.deviantart.com/j…
-A promise is made in the first 250-500 words (in my story it occurs at exactly 500 words)
-The promise is broken
-The promise-breaker has a consequence--and an annoying habit (Nacho's is calling her Baby, in English)
-A taxi is involved
-The story cannot begin in either character's home
Due yesterday, which isn't bad considering I only saw the prompt two days ago. c: Also finally found a use for a weird sentence someone said to me recently--score.
Points to critique on:
-Language barriers: for anyone who doesn't speak Spanish, were the Spanish phrases off-putting? Were there too many? Did it seem like I was trying too hard to make Dani's use of the language imperfect?
I had originally intended to have both of their phones run out of saldo--minutes--because that happened to me more times than you'd probably believe. Damn Movistar gives you almost no warning for that crap. But I thought that, even though it's realistic, it wouldn't sound very realistic. Nixed it.
Also, taxis in Argentina are actually pretty darn safe. No worries. C:
Thanks for reading.